Hello!
Well, Christmas break is over now. Time to buckle down and sprint to the end. My honors thesis is due January 16th, and I will defend it in March. Dr. Burton and I have agreed that I should have my eBook finished by the time of my defense.
For now, here is an email I received from Professor Bennion, my honors faculty mentor:
Sorry to take so long. I had a lot to read as I left England. This is about finished. Most of my comments just deal with sentences and word clarity. I think you should spend a few hours thinking about the ending. It's good, but it can be better as you think about the trouble you've had since coming home. I don't think you need to narrate it day by day, but how seriously you've been unseated is told instead of being evoked or enacted. That's an exaggeration. but I think you could be even more precise and clear about how difficult it's been. And if you have come to a tentative peace about it, you might make more clear how difficult that was. The last essay is slightly too quick. As I said earlier, I think it's good but that it can be better. This certainly can be defended in January.
I do also hope that you're feeling better.
Well, Christmas break is over now. Time to buckle down and sprint to the end. My honors thesis is due January 16th, and I will defend it in March. Dr. Burton and I have agreed that I should have my eBook finished by the time of my defense.
For now, here is an email I received from Professor Bennion, my honors faculty mentor:
Sorry to take so long. I had a lot to read as I left England. This is about finished. Most of my comments just deal with sentences and word clarity. I think you should spend a few hours thinking about the ending. It's good, but it can be better as you think about the trouble you've had since coming home. I don't think you need to narrate it day by day, but how seriously you've been unseated is told instead of being evoked or enacted. That's an exaggeration. but I think you could be even more precise and clear about how difficult it's been. And if you have come to a tentative peace about it, you might make more clear how difficult that was. The last essay is slightly too quick. As I said earlier, I think it's good but that it can be better. This certainly can be defended in January.
